Steam
on the Horizon
by
Melissa Conroy
Chapter
1, Part 1
The
Horizon bobbed and swayed, tugging at her mooring lines like a
rebellious horse pulling against its halter. From his position on the
wharf, first mate Gavin Roberts eyed the bloated canopy of the
airship critically as he approached
the vessel. Tight as a woman's corset, the airship's envelope was
straining to hold back cubic yards of agitated steam from bursting
loose and the seams of the airbags were visible underneath their
rough canvas cover as they stretched desperately outward in futile
attempts to find more space. On the crowded, noisy wharf, other
airships were snugly strapped down in canvas-cushioned berths or tied
up at the wharf in preparation for takeoff, but they were all sedate
and restrained in comparison to the Horizon's
erratic dance across the sky. The airship was hissing in impatience,
and Roberts' feet quickened, carrying his broad-shouldered frame
through the press of crowds roving up and down the length of the
wharf.
Idiot
Silverman's ignoring the pressure gauge again, Roberts
thought to himself darkly as he irritably shoved his way past an
airman overloaded with gunnysacks. The airman staggered out of the
way, barely avoiding a collision as the taller man plowed through the
crowd with nary a glance at who might be impeding his path.
I'm gone a half hour and it all goes to hell,
Roberts added, his gray-green eyes fastened intently on the airship,
seeking any evidence of an imminent catastrophe.
Cursed
ship. They all said it about the
Horizon, too many
burst valves and men falling to their deaths to encourage an
onslaught of eager volunteers every time there was an opening on the
ship's roster. But Roberts knew better; sure, the Horizon
was a fussy little bird, apt to sulk or threaten a crash if
mishandled, but she was as light as a cloud and damned fast, capable
of racing a scant twenty hours from London to Edinburgh on a good
run if she had the right crew to baby her.
But
Captain Albert Smothers was not the type of man to get the most out
of an airship like the Horizon or
any airship, truth be told. When he wasn't boozing it up in his
quarters, the captain was apt to be barking out orders that changed
by the hour or fighting with the engineers or sometimes leaning over
the edge of the ship spewing his guts out over whatever landscape
they happened to be crossing due to chronic airsickness combined with
too much alcohol. More than once, some doxy had come wandering
sheepishly out of the captain's cabin after the Horizon
had docked in a port, and then there had been the care and feeding of
the unexpected passenger until the airship could land somewhere and
see the girl off with enough money to get back home.
It
was Roberts ran the show, had to, otherwise God knows where they
would have ended up on this last run, what with the Captain demanding
a change of course halfway through their flight to Liverpool that
added an additional three hundred miles to the trek. Roberts had been
flying under Captain Smothers' unskilled leadership (if it could be
called that) for nigh on two years now, and if the captain had any
discernible attributes, predictability was one of them. By this
point, Roberts had grown reasonably skilled at tactfully redirecting
his superior away from the worst of his idiotic ideas and mitigating
damages if the Captain Smothers insisted that his harebrained schemes
be enacted. Now, worriedly observing the Horizon's bloated
envelope straining to keep from bursting, Roberts knew that his brief
absence had allowed yet another magnificently stupid decision to
manifest.
I love the imagery. Great descriptions, very vivid. I can see it in my mind.
ReplyDeleteHmm, it's silly but the first thing that jumped out at me is you say wharf 4 times in the first paragraph. Quay, maybe?
Oh, maybe the doxy should wander out after the ship "departs" port? At first I was thinking, she only shows up after they dock?
How did Smother's get to be captain if he's such an idiot?
I was wondering the same thing about the captain. Sounds like the kind of guy that inherits it or wins it gambling, Han Solo notwithstanding.
DeleteAnd maybe I'm just slow on the uptake, but the first sentence, I didn't catch the italics and thought the horizon in question was the literal horizon. I was a bit confused by the mooring lines until I got to the word 'airship'. Maybe move airship right before Horizon?
Actually, now that you mention it, I also did a double-take at Horizon, not realizing it was the name of a ship at first.
DeleteAnother thought, reading the subsequent two excerpts, I realized that I didn't have a good feel for the setting. It's mentioned later that the wharfs are 75 feet above the ground. This is much different than the 'real world', and I feel like maybe it bears explaining. Are they by the harbor alongside the regular docks, or an entirely separate area? A case could be made for either, really. Do these docks protrude from a cliff or a giant building? And what town is it? Liverpool is mentioned but it's not clear if that's where they actually are or not. These question popped into my mind in the later excerpts, and it seemed like maybe it would be good to set the scene a bit earlier. I think it could be done fairly quickly, so as not to drone on and interrupt the characters and action.
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